in the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in small community?
In recent years living in
a
urban Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
cities
have become a trend. In old times people
used to live in small communities where they know everyone around them but in today's time
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,time
people
know very few people
in large cities
. Living in a small area have it's
both advantages and disadvantages as well and I will discuss both views in Correct your spelling
its
this
essay.
To begin
with, the foremost up side
of living in a small community is as everyone knows others they have the better communication skills. Due to that Correct your spelling
upside
people
knows
the situation of everyone better and they were able to help Change the verb form
know
people
in case of emergency. For example
, in case of someone has a medical emergancy
on one call many Correct your spelling
emergency
people
can gather around and help the person in need. Not only that but because of this
people
have less responsiblity
as they can look after each other. As they live within the Correct your spelling
responsibility
short range
they don't have to travel too much in case of need as it can save time for them.
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short-range
However
, on the other side, due to less population
there are Add a comma
,population
less
opportunities for Change the quantifier
fewer
people
living there. For example
, if someone wants to pursue a career in marketing as it is impossible to achive
big goals in small villages Correct your spelling
achieve
for
that they need Change preposition
apply
megalopolis
. Correct article usage
a megalopolis
Furthermore
in large Add a comma
,Furthermore
cities
they know Add a comma
,cities
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
people
that does not mean it is a Correct your spelling
bad
bed
thing. In fact, as they know few Correct your spelling
bad
people
they do not have to worry about other people
's emotions. And in Add an article
an emergency
emergency
they can always take Add a comma
,emergency
help
of Correct article usage
the help
techenolgy
to solve their problem as now technology Correct your spelling
technology
have
replaced humans in all aspects.
To sum up, I reiterate my Change the verb form
has
opinoin
that living in Correct your spelling
opinion
a big
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big cities
a big city
cities
outweighs it's
advantages on Replace the word
its
it's
disadvantages. But with some Replace the word
its
initiatives
we can make even big Add a comma
,initiatives
cities
more considerate with each other and we can expand our communication.Submitted by pakshit910 on
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