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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There are growing numbers of men and women choosing to have
children
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 later in life these days. In my opinion, the financial advantages of
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 trend far outweigh any perceived downsides. The most significant tradeoffs of
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 relate to opportunity and maturity. Many individuals decide early on in their career to wait until their mid to late 30s to have
children
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. The natural risk here is that if the relationship ends before that point or they
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 have trouble conceiving, they may end up childless.
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 possibility is lower today due to advances in fertility science but still exists.
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, having
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 is a maturing experience. If an individual waits until late in life to raise a child,
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 they delay the experience gained and may later regret their decision. Most
parents
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 would openly admit that parenthood is a life-altering milestone and defining moment of adulthood.
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, the disadvantages detailed above pale in comparison to the economic merits of delaying childbirth.
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, most young
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 are not in an ideal situation in their careers. Many working
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 earn low salaries and work long hours. Once they have a child that means the majority of their day is occupied and they may feel trapped and overburdened. It is
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 difficult to switch careers or move to a new location as well as afford all the expenses incumbent on
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.
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 often results in
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 becoming resentful and projecting their animosity towards their
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 or significant other.
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,
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 who are firmly established in their careers, earn decent salaries and have savings set aside have both the time and energy to devote to raising their
children
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 well without having to stress about making ends meet. In conclusion, despite marginal risks concerning the opportunity and experience, it is an overall positive for financial reasons that many prospective
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 are putting off childbirth.
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,
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 trend should be welcomed and encouraged.
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