Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

In recent years the volume of advertising through different ways are increased significantly .in
this
regard there are some
people
who believe that advertising is not effective as before and
people
do not care can about it anymore.
However
, I believe advertisement and its manners like other fields of science
has
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changed and still can convincing
people
to be attracted by
companies
products
.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that due to the changes amount of advertising which
companies
produced to obtain customers
people
no longer deceived to buy new
products
. In fact, most
companies
and advertisement agencies
in addition
to their mission to introducing their
products
or services more appealing to the customer they affected them
adverse
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.
For example
, they bombard tv shows billboards or even any blogs on the internet with their announcements.
As a result
,
conversely
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people
avoid them and try to ignore them as a thing who never seen
them
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before.
However
, I believe advertising
are
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still containing
same
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the same
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useful
techniques
which are
the
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good incentive for
people
to convince them to buy more.
At
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these years using some technologies like artificial intelligence (AI) some novel advertising
techniques
are introduced that are used by
companies
. Using these
techniques
provide
companies
some
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with some
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useful insight about their customers that give them
this
opportunity to grasp more customer.
For instance
, Facebook and Amazon track their
customers
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customer's
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behaviour and can predict whenever they need to buy something. The more fascinating thing is that they even can predict which exact product a customer
need
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in the future.
As a result
, by using AI and some new
techniques
people
are now buying something without they know that they have been targeted by advertising magic. In conclusion,
although
some
people
believe that the advertising methods are not attractive
any more
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anymore
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for
people
I believe using new tools are well-equipped
companies
to sale their
products
like before.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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