Some countries owning home rather than renting. Do you think this is Negative or Positive

Poverty
nowsdays
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nowadays
is
such
a very valuable inventory for human life around the world. Some
family
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families
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believe that purchasing a habitat is better than renting. While the others don't. These
both
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contrasting viewpoints will be discussed in
this
essay along with my opinion. Undoubtedly,
people
think that buying a habitat to stay
is
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suit for them according to three reasons:
First
, they are wealthy
people
or families. So they have sufficient money to effort house to stay. Even though how expensive they are.
Next
, some of the crowd or families think that they need to stay in
this
place or province for a lifetime
,
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when they calculated amount of money which they need to expense for renting is
similarly
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to purchasing home.
Thus
they decided to buy them , and the
last
ovious
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obvious
example is home is the warmest place for family members as well as an assembly spot.
Nevertheless
, some
people
prefer to renting than buying.
As a result
of two reasons.
Firstly
, they are labourers with low-income.
Thus
they don't have desuffient money to the effort and another example is they are
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countryside, who going out of their own province to work at other province or countries.
Hence
they will think that it is not necessary for them to buy it. From my ,perspective I
also
prefer buying than renting a house with the factors that I mentioned above. In conclusion, Some
people
will think buying
home
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is better than renting. While the others don't. According to
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me
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I prefer buying
house
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a house
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because it is going to be the warmest place for my family members.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • mortgage
  • equity
  • property ladder
  • real estate
  • investment
  • asset
  • debt
  • appreciation
  • depreciation
  • interest rates
  • tenure
  • down payment
  • foreclosure
  • gentrification
  • urban sprawl
  • sustainability
  • energy efficiency
  • property tax
  • zoning laws
  • subprime lending
  • equity loan
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