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Write about the following topic: In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The scarcity of
food
 has always been prevalent in some parts of the
world
. Despite modern
technologies
 being employed in agriculture,
still
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 a large number of humans sleeps without
food
. I believe
this
 is because of the multifaceted issues in
food
production
 and
distribution
 in the not so well developed economies.
This
 problem can be solved by equipping nations having no
food
 security with the latest farming
technologies
 and justified
distribution
 of
food
 to these countries. With regards to, roadblocks to deficiency of continuity in
food
 availability are multifactorial,
however
, the most important factors are non-availability of modern machinery and unequal access to
food
 in some parts of the
world
.
For example
, Ethiopia which has observed the worst
hunger
 the human history has ever witnessed
,
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 does not have the capacity to produce enough
food
 for its residents due to the fact that, no modern
technologies
 are being employed for
food
production
.
Secondly
, the countries which have the capability to produce large quantities of
food
 do not reach the most vulnerable communities.
For instance
,
although
 the
World
Food
 Program exercises maximum effort in the
distribution
food
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 still a large part of the
world
 remains without
food
.
Therefore
, the unavailability of robust agricultural machinery and non-equitable access to
food
 are the main challenges for
hunger
. Turning to the solution in combating the scourge of
hunger
, the substantial effort has to be made in enabling
food
 stricken nations with the latest
technologies
 namely equipment, seeds, fertilizers and harvesting techniques. Take
for
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 example, if a nation is provided with the machines that can sow and harvest large areas, resultantly the crop
production
 will
also
 increase.
In addition
 to that, the equitable
distribution
 of
food
 by international organizations can help reduce the effect of decreased
production
 on local areas. In conclusion, people are suffering from
hunger
 due to hiccups in
food
production
 and its
distribution
, which can be overcome by providing enablers to those countries for better productivity.
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