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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The scarcity of
food
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 has always been prevalent in some parts of the
world
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. Despite modern
technologies
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 being employed in agriculture,
still
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 a large number of humans sleeps without
food
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. I believe
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 is because of the multifaceted issues in
food
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production
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 and
distribution
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 in the not so well developed economies.
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 problem can be solved by equipping nations having no
food
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 security with the latest farming
technologies
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 and justified
distribution
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 of
food
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 to these countries. With regards to, roadblocks to deficiency of continuity in
food
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 availability are multifactorial,
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, the most important factors are non-availability of modern machinery and unequal access to
food
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 in some parts of the
world
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.
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, Ethiopia which has observed the worst
hunger
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 the human history has ever witnessed
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 does not have the capacity to produce enough
food
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 for its residents due to the fact that, no modern
technologies
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 are being employed for
food
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production
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.
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, the countries which have the capability to produce large quantities of
food
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 do not reach the most vulnerable communities.
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,
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 the
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Food
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 Program exercises maximum effort in the
distribution
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food
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 still a large part of the
world
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 remains without
food
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.
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, the unavailability of robust agricultural machinery and non-equitable access to
food
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 are the main challenges for
hunger
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. Turning to the solution in combating the scourge of
hunger
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, the substantial effort has to be made in enabling
food
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 stricken nations with the latest
technologies
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 namely equipment, seeds, fertilizers and harvesting techniques. Take
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for
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 example, if a nation is provided with the machines that can sow and harvest large areas, resultantly the crop
production
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 will
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 increase.
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 to that, the equitable
distribution
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 of
food
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 by international organizations can help reduce the effect of decreased
production
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 on local areas. In conclusion, people are suffering from
hunger
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 due to hiccups in
food
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production
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 and its
distribution
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, which can be overcome by providing enablers to those countries for better productivity.
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