some people say that spending time to develop a successful career is the most important thing. Others say that spending time with friends and family is important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that spending
time
proper way is the most important thing in any human
life
. There are those who say that
time
should
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to build a
career
.
However
, others believe that it's important to spend
time
with friends and family. In
this
,
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I will examine
the
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both sides of the
arguments
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and provide my overall opinion to support my
arguments
. Generally ,speaking there are mainly two reasons why
people
believe that we should spend
time
to build my
career
. Perhaps the main reason why
people
are in favour of
this
idea
is
because
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develop a successful
career
is the
first
priority and all other relationships are secondary.
That is
the reason we should spend
time
as much as possible to develop a
career
. If anyone can develop a
career
, the rest of the
the
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people
will come in
life
without any effort. A
further
point in favour of
this
idea
is that, without
,
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a,career
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career
people
have to be always dependent on others.
For instance
, if any
people
spend their
time
building relationships instated of build careers, they can not do anything in their
life
othout
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without
that
thought
other's help. Despite, the
arguments
there is cause for the
idea
that spending
time
with spend and family is important. Perhaps the main reason why
people
think
that is
a good
idea
is
because
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relationship with friends and family is the main basis for mental peace. if any
people
have a good
career
but a not good relationship with friends and family, there is no value for their
life
. Bad relationships turn into
a personal problems
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personal problems
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such
as loneliness, alcoholism and
alinieat
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alignment
. in conclusion,
this
is a topic which is very relevant to modern society.despite
arguments
to the contrary. I feel very strongly that, spending
time
for developing a
career
is important. if have only a good relationship without
career
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a career
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,
life
will be always dependent on others.
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