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With the evolution of technological development, buses, cars or trucks will be self-driving and only passengers will take part in the trip. In my personal perspective, this advancement in traffic brings more benefits rather than any drawbacks which may cause.

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With the science evolution, buses, cars, and trucks will be
driverless
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 with the installation of AI
technology
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.
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, in these transportations, only passengers take part in the trip. Creating the opportunity of the development of
technology
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 to take part in traffic helps resulting many efficacious effects. Compared to traditional four-wheel
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,
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 new kind of transportation is much more convenient, user-friendly. Especially, with the disabled/aged, driving a vehicle is as not easy as others because of equivalent impairments. With the support of the new
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, the control of the vehicle will be automatic;
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 the “old driver” can truly rest and enjoy the scenery without putting their mind into driving. Not only bring satisfaction to the passengers, but mechanized means of transport can
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 reduce the considerable amount of accident traffic accidents. Many research outcomes from all over the world suggest that the main cause of car crashes is drunk drivers and the lack of concentration.
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 line of reasoning adds credence to bring
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vehicles
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 into the market.
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 the advantages that
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technology
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 confer to the users, in my view, there is one main problem that will need to handle when releasing those kinds of
vehicles
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. As the name says it all, “driveless” four-wheel transportations do not need a driver, so many people who earn a living by driving the taxi, the truck will have to face the high possibility of being jobless.
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, the rate of unemployment will rise, which is a noticeable disadvantage for the national economy. In conclusion, my assertion to
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 school of thought is agreeable. As can be seen, the sake that
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vehicles
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 bring to the clients exceeds the downside of it.
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