Some people say now we can see films on phones or tablets, there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that we can fully enjoy in cinema only. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Movies
are one of the most important means of entertainment in today’s world. Many
of
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the
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people
believe that
movies
could be watched on
phone
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rather than in
cinema
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, while some believe that
it
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more fun watching
movies
in
cinema
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.
This
essay will discuss on explore both the view with relevant examples. During COVID times, everyone was instructed to stay home by initiating lockdown. During
this
time most of the
people
found
convenient
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watching
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movies
on phones and
also
found it
very
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cost effective
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option.
For example
, Netflix, amazon
have
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started releasing
movies
even before they got released in
theater
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and you just need to pay
subscription
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fee to watch
movies
. Due to
this
people
started spending more time with families, enjoying
movies
at home. On other
hand
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it
also
had disadvantages as it is making
people
use mobiles more often and
also
getting them restricted to their house. Every individual should know the right usage of any application even when it is easily available. One should
also
not forget the experience,
movie
watchers can have while watching
movies
in
theatre
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in
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big
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screen.
Also
, theatre
provide
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great
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sound system which makes us feel the
movie
more
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real and they have
wide
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range of facilities.
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, the
theater
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near my house provides options of different cuisine dishes and can be brought prepared to your seat without needing you to wait at
counter
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. Recently there has been a lot of increase in cost for food and tickets at few locations. The
people
should find
right
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options while choosing the cinema halls and not go overboard spending too much to watch a film. Despite the convenience, experience plays
more
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important role in watching
movies
.
This
essay has discussed
on
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how
movies
are being watched on
phone
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phones
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or tablets and how few find it more interesting to watch
movies
in
movie
halls. In my opinion, I would say
theaters
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are the best option to enjoy the
movie
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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