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some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. to what extents do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Music
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 has always been a delight to all human
beings
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, regardless of their culture or age. It
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 has been considered as a way of communication. The majority of people would assume it is what brings everyone together even if they are not sharing the same custom or come from different generations. I personally believe
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 an idea is remarkable and I strongly agree with that. To support what I have claimed recently, I must indicate that
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 each nation has its own cultural background and they differ from each other,
music
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 and musical instruments can bond them. The reason I say
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 because
music
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 is about rhythm, and all human
beings
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 are familiar with that. No one can reject the fact that once they hear a symphony their body reacts to that, whether they are doing it willingly or not.
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, Iran is a multi-cultured country and we can hear different dialects or accents everywhere. Each region has its own special
music
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such
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 as Kurdish, Turkish, Arab, etc. but once a Turkish song is played for a Kurd person, he is loosening himself to the melody. To continue, it must be pointed out that
music
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 knows no generation gap.
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 nowadays that old school songs are becoming so trendy again and people refer to them as something nostalgic. Not only does it bring some good memories of those glorious old days but, it
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 helps the youngsters get to what their parents or grandparents used to listen to. To make it more tangible, we can see that lots of new cafes are being opened which
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 theme is
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a vintage
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 or old school just to connect
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 generation to the younger one. In conclusion, it should be said that neither culture nor age can be an issue when it comes to
music
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.
Music
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 is like a free gate that tries to link human
beings
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, with various cultural backgrounds or age gaps, to each other. If human
beings
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 are about to agree on one thing that they have in common, that would be
music
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, because its melodies and harmonies are the same for every individual.
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