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Many people migrate from rural to urban areas. What are the benefits and limitations.

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Nowadays, many people migrate from rural to urban
areas
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 for taking the benefits of urban amenities and
better
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a better
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
However
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,
this
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 trend can affect
both
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 the adaptation of
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 and high living
cost
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costs
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
both
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 pros and cons that are associated with
this
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 trend.
To begin
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 with, the
first
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 principal reason for relocating rural to urban
areas
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 is ample
of
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employment opportunities. As the cities are the centre of trade and commerce which provide
diffferent
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different
 placement opportunities for
both
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 the fresher as well as experienced persons.
Furthermore
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, urban facilities
such
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 as emergencies health care units are
the
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 boon for
large
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a large
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 number of persons.
For instance
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, recently my uncle fell down from stairs and he was unable to stand up properly
then
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 we brought very quickly to
hospital
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the hospital
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. Due to the 24 hours hospital
facility
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 he
treated
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was treated
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 well by doctors.
Hence
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,
the
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migration does bring benefits to the people
on
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to
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large
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a large
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 extent.
On the other hand
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, despite the upsides of
this
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 trajectory, the drawback cannot be undermined.
Firstly
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, the living cost of urban
areas
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are
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 exorbitant.
For
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example
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 the house rent of cities
such
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 as Delhi and Mumbai are
sky rocketing
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skyrocketing
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 and can burn a hole in the pocket of
middle class
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middle-class
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 society.
Secondly
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,
due to
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the rapidly shifting to urban
areas
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 results in increased population and pollution.
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, due to the high
population
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,population
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 there are many other problems associated
such
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 as shortage of shelter and traffic-jam. So, move from
villages
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village
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 to town
also
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 carry many limitations to society. To conclude, It
is believe
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is believed
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 that
this
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 trend of migration is
debatable
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 topic. it
give
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both
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 boon and bane to
the
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society. Many people are
opposing
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 to
this
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. I regard
this
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 as a
possitive
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positive
 sign.
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