Some people think that sports involving violence such as boxing and martial arts should be banned from TV as well as from international sports competition. what is your opinion?

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There is an ongoing debate whether violent

sports

should be banned from the mass media as well as from

the

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international

sports

competition

such

as Olympics. I think there would be some advantages

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banning

the

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violent

sports

, but the drawbacks of banning

the

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sports

eclipse the benefits. On the one hand, banning violent

sports

like mixed martial arts affects

people

positively. To be specific, especially young

people

are easy to get influenced by mass media, so if mass media broadcasts

the

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violent

sports

it will give strong impressions and play a significant role in forming wrong behaviours and attitudes to the youth by watching it.

Therefore

, prohibiting these

sports

will have positive impacts on society to be maintained securely.

On the other hand

, prohibiting watching

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violent

sports

is absurd.

Firstly

, there are a bunch of

people

who are really into these

sports

. These fans release their stresses and enjoy their private time by

wathcing

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watching

the games. As well as that, even though the public

have

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had

violence

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instinct from primitives, they used to satisfy their violence instinct by watching the games, not

commiting

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committing

any violence. Take Rome empire as an example, gladiator played a vital role in satisfying crowds' needs by showing the performances. In

this

respect, banning

the

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sports

disturbs

people

's freedom and preferences, so it would lead to some illegal actions if there is not

any

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alternative. In conclusion,

although

prohibiting broadcasting and holding violent

sports

matches can contribute to society

positvely

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positively

demerits

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of banning

the

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sports

seem to surpass

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the benefits.

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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