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Happiness if often considered difficult to define. Why is this? What factors determine happiness?

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Everyone in the world wants to be happy, but it is unfortunate to know that there is no one particular definition to define it, because of a lack of measuring tools.
This
 essay will try to explain why it is considered so, and
also
 demonstrate the factor determining it. There is no universal definition for happiness, and one cannot measure it. It is unbelievable that in
this
 scientific world, we do not have an objective tool to part it, and often it remains subjective. Every disease in
this
 current world can be measured objectively and the severity can be graded.
However
, not being happy is not considered as suffering , and
hence
 there are no scales to measure it. Happiness is determined by multiple factors. Money is considered to play a crucial role in it. In
this
 modern society people are judged based on their financial status, and,
in addition
, it
also
 decides whose to be respected.
For example
, if an individual earns less currency, even though they are in a respectable profession,
such
 as doctors or engineers community does not pay enough respect they deserve. But, on the counterpart, if a person has plenty of money, even though he or she is a criminal, the community pay humongous respect.
Hence
, a lack of respect and recognition makes an individual sad.
Similarly
, it
also
 depends on the peer groups and the family members. Groups that have a positive attitude generally, boost confidence and
also
 helps an individual to remain happy.
Furthermore
, good family dynamics are
also
 essential.
For example
, it is seen that friends with negative behaviour and a family which does not support a person, pushes a person to become depressed, which may increase suicidal tendencies.
Thus
, surroundings play an important role. In conclusion, the lack of appropriate methods to measure happiness makes it difficult to define, and many factors play an important role to determine it,
such
 as financial stays, peer groups and family members.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subjective
  • complex
  • embrace
  • vary
  • definition
  • material possessions
  • achievements
  • personal values
  • relationships
  • self-fulfillment
  • psychological
  • physiological
  • genetics
  • predispositions
  • cultural
  • societal
  • perception
  • pursuit
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