Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes.

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Nowadays, the modern
world
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has various kinds of important documents and
data
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, which were kept under high security. Some
people
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were arguing, that it is good to exchange more details.
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as scientific experiments, business secrets, military
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and any other valuable resource throughout the commercial
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. Other
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were arguing, that information is more valuable to be exchanging totally free.
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. More
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did not like that share much important things with others.
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is a more dominant and high risk to exchange into the public.
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, these days every part of the
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USA, the UK, Russia, China are explored by several immunity vaccinations. These details around the medication experiments, they not sharing to across the
world
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due to they prefer to handle by the monopoly of vaccinations and earn plenty of money regarding that. Every important
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data
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has much value in today’s
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, even anybody does not prefer to sharing valuable sources from
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party
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.
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, some human thinks is that better way to transfer expensive reports with the public. It has several advantages like
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people
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could gain lots of knowledge regard subjects,
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can aware more accurate information.Occasionally, they can
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some benefits around that.
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the business environment today many
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companies
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huge competition to enhance profit, market share,customers. They
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with their rivals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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