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Write about the following topic: Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that authorities ought to plough more funds on railways
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 of on
roads
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. Development in the communication networks is an essential factor leading to economic growth,
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, I believe resources have to be earmarked according to the needs of a country and not more on railways than on roadways. Installing a network of
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 systems is vital for the transportation of products from point of manufacturing to its consumers.
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 affords the transfer of a large number of materials to its destination with greater speed and economy. As trains have more capacity to carry luggage at one time, makes it more convenient for the traders to book their orders.
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, it cannot be developed in all parts of a country given the differences in geographical features, making it almost impossible for
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.
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, in India, most of the hilly train does not have a railway network due to its rugged terrain.
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,
roads
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 play an important role in the transportation of produces from every corner of the manufacturing facility. Developing
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 allows small and medium-sized producers to ship their finished products to their consumers who are living in small towns without any
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 network, making it more trustworthy for them.
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 as, when the products are loaded from a small town the endpoint can
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 be reached on the same vehicle, resulting in the lesser transfer between
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 and trucks. In conclusion, spending money on developing all forms of
roads
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 and train tracks is the need of the hour and I do not agree with sparing greater funds for railways than for
roads
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.
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