Individual can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is still believed by some
people
, that only governments and large organizations can make a positive change in the issue
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humankind
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human kind
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humankind
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is facing due to the
enviromental
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environmental
crisis, and individuals are not strong enough to make a difference. In
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I would like to evaluate both views and share my own opinion. While national governments have the power to fight issues connected to ecological issues, many of them have chosen to give up the fight because of the money they might lose. Only a few countries,
for
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Switzerland, has decided to create a plan, which can be followed by their
citiziens
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citizens
.
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, the price
for
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the
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fuel is one of the highest in the whole
Europe
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.
Furthermore
, the government in Switzerland has decided to reward those, who follow and support the sustainable plan by lowering their taxes. At the
first
sight, it might look that an individual is not able to make difference, but in the online world we are living in today, influencers,
for instance
, have a huge impact. More and more
people
promote their sustainable way of life, which have a positive impact on the whole society. These
people
show the world the making small steps by many individuals can be enough to preserve the Earth for
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generations. In conclusion, I believe, that passionate
individual
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might have
bigger
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impact
that
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governments and international organizations. In my
opinion
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it is more natural to follow someone who is
genuienly
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genuinely
interested in the future of
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Mother Earth
,
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because more and more
people
will follow their way of thinking.
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