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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbors as they did in the past. Why is this so and what can be done to improve contact between neighbors?

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At present, most of us do not have a close connection with our
next
-door
people
 due to various
reasons
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the main
reasons
 for
this
 phenomenon and I will make some practical suggestions to overcome
this
 situation.
To begin
 with, many families had very close relationships with their neighbouring families in the good old days. But gradually it seems those connections had been fading away along with the time. In my opinion, the main
reasons
 for
this
 are hectic work schedules without much relaxing time and the improvement of technology over the
last
 few decades. Today, both elders and youngsters, we all sunk in various duties and tasks, without much free time for others. Elders are often very busy with their jobs while youngsters are extremely busy with their studies starting from very young ages like age 5. The endless competitive nature of society is one of the root causes of
this
 phenomenon.
Also
, with the development of technology, by nature
people
 seldom talk to
people
face
 to
face
, because they can easily use various technologies to communicate with others irrespective of where they are physically living starting from your neighbour to your friend in another country. To come out from the previously mentioned circumstances, we should try to engage and talk to our neighbour's
face
 to
face
 as much as we can. Apart from that, we can share certain things on regular basis,
such
 as specially made food.
Furthermore
, we can arrange regular meet-ups and invite our neighbours on special occasions, for ,example birthdays or anniversaries. To sum up, nowadays, we can clearly observe a distance between our neighbouring
people
, rather than it used to be in the past due to aforementioned very
reasons
. But if we can understand
this
 situation and act vigilantly, we can still bridge
this
 gap between our neighbours and have improved close contacts to build up a better society.
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