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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding an article in an International Travel
Magazine
 which contains wrong information about my
town
.
First,
let me introduce myself, I am Gonzalo Fuentes Major of Villa Resell the
town
 that your
magazine
 talked about.
Firstly
, Villa Gesell is a family destination where many families come every summer to relax and enjoy the beaches and their natural attractions, allowing them to have very good moments with their lovers.
In contrast
 with your article that says that it is a destination for young people where nightclubs and bars are the principal attractions. I believe that the
Magazine
 should provide the right information
due to
 it has international influence,
while
 more than 300.000 people all around the world visit our city, they know the pure truth. Providing false information could lead to a bad reputation for your
Magazine
. So I suggest
to do
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another article talking about the other side of the
town
 mentioning its amazing beaches and natural attractions. In
this
way
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 people could have another point of view of the
town
 and your
magazine
 would not lose its reputation. Hope you take
this
 matter into consideration. Yours Faithfully, Gonzalo Fuentes
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coherence cohesion
Try to improve the logical structure of your sentences to enhance clarity. For example, 'In contrast with your article that says that it is a destination for young people where nightclubs and bars are the principal attractions, Villa Gesell is, in fact, a family destination.'
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors, such as 'providing false information could lead to a bad reputation for your Magazine'—this would be smoother as, 'providing false information could harm your magazine's reputation.'
task achievement
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task, including correcting the misinformation, explaining the importance of providing accurate details, and suggesting a solution.
task achievement
Your writing tone is appropriate for a formal letter, which adds to the credibility of your letter.
coherence cohesion
You have effectively used paragraphs to separate different ideas, which enhances readability.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-done and match the formal context of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rectify
  • Misrepresentation
  • Tourism
  • Editor
  • Credibility
  • Accuracy
  • Local heritage
  • Fact-checking
  • Repercussions
  • Counteractive measures
  • Publishing ethics
  • Clarification
  • Factual error
  • Misconception
  • Authenticity
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