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Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, there has been an ongoing discussion about whether saving
money
 for rainy days is necessary or not.
However
 many people prefer to spend
money
 and not to save. In
this
 essay, I will examine the core reasons why the above statement has been said. Nowadays , living lifestyle has changed compared to the olden days. With advanced technology, we are exposed to the new world. To maintain our lifestyle to others we tend to spend a lot of
money
.
For example
, brands determine your status. We tend to spend more
money
 on the brand when you can get
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same
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 items for a cheaper price.
In addition
, the living costs had increased tremendously. The researcher has found that fresh graduates nowadays may not make an effort to own any property. They trapped with other commitments as study loan, car and etc.
On the other hand
, we have been taught to save
money
 since young.
Thus
this
 will become a habit as we are growing. Personally, I have been raised by a middle-class family. I'm used to living on a budget. Spend
money
 only when it's necessary. ,
Moreover
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 we don't have the privilege because we are the minority citizens in our country.
Such
, situation has made us spend wisely and save up for our future. In conclusion,
its
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 an individual's choice whether to save or not. If you prefer to spend and enjoy every penny of your earnings it is up to you.As long we are not burdening anyone.
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