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It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #lifestyle #illness #treatment #people
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Some
people
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 believe that spending public funds on encouraging a healthy lifestyle to avoid diseases is more essential than investing in treating
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 who already suffered from the disease. In my viewpoint, each criterion has its own effectiveness. On the one hand, I would agree that building a great lifestyle effect a higher standard of
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.
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, the government spends funds on repairing various social facilities which improve the public environment
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 as squares, parks,...
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 decline
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in pollution
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 which benefits
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people
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’s physical health and mental health.
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, spending money on enhancing citizens
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 which absolutely increases the performance of the
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 generation.
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, the children will be born without congenital disease unless their parents have any issues.
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 think that invest money in treatment not only provides
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 with highly effective therapies but
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 prevents potential hazards in the future. Day by day, with the varieties of diseases, the improvement of medical technology plays a fundamental role in enhancing the quality of
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.
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, the percentage of
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 who have already been vaccinated against the Corona Virus has reduced the mortality rate when infected. In conclusion, there is no doubt that public funds are extremely crucial for both aspects. Public money from the governments can level up the performance of
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 and prevent disease before
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 suffer from illness. Both criteria will have a positive result in the death rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • chronic diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • public health campaigns
  • lifestyle-related illnesses
  • quality of life
  • health-conscious society
  • allocate funds
  • balanced healthcare system
  • comprehensive healthcare strategy
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