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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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 think that
work
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 is the ultimate goal in every
people
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’s
life
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 and to live a meaningful
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,
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 has to excel in it. In my opinion, it is partially true because it provides us money which is essential for our survival but
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 can live a meaningful and happy
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 even without it. On the
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 hand,
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 is a source of our salaries which allows us to pay for the things that we need or want.
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,
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 are paid according to their success in their field,
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 some
people
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 simply
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 to make some positive impacts on society and the world as a whole. Unlike past, the cost of living in modern society is pretty expensive and
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, the majority of
people
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 don’t see their existence without a job.
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,
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 in America have to pay hefty taxes and fees for every service they take and without proper economic background,
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 is guaranteed to struggle.
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,
people
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 consider
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 as
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 of the most important things in their
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.

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,
on the other hand
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,
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 can ensure a prosperous future even without success in their career because
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 is not only about materialistic gains and becoming the best. Rather, it is about fulfilling your
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 purposes like being happy, contented, being thankful, and many other.
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,
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 can
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 for the welfare of others by committing to
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 in charities and care homes because you will experience love, happiness, and peace despite being paid little money. In fact, the majority of rich
people
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 are unhappy even though they are living a successful
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. In conclusion, each and every
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 should
work
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 for their dream jobs and the money but at the same time, should not forget the significance of spiritual wellbeing because without it
life
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 is truly meaningless.
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