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In some areas of the us a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by adults. What is your opinion about this?

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curfew
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 is used to control the political assembling that occurred in Thailand or the pandemic that spread around the world
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 as SACOV2(COVID-19) that will help the government easier to control the situation.
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, A
curfew
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 may be used to disadvantages the citizen, which are coming in the
next
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 paragraph of
this
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 essay. The disadvantages of the citizen that caused by a
curfew
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.
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, the
people
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 will have less
time
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 to do or work a job that makes the domestic money circulation decreasing because
people
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 do not have the times to spend their money and in some situations
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 as a pandemic, the countries maybe have to close the entrance of their countries to stop spreading a disease.
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, It will limit our life to go out or find an experience because a
curfew
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 is not mean merely determining the
time
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 you could not go out of doors, it
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 you can not go to some province.
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,
curfew
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 was required because there was something wrong with the situation.
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,
curfew
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 recovers the situation when it was used at the right
time
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 because if it is too late it will be no better than was not used it.
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, when a
curfew
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 has to be enforced mostly it is used to make the pros for their
people
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 than to take advantage. to conclude, I think a
curfew
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 for teenagers in which some areas is no different from the
curfew
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 that applies to the whole country. because it is used to protect
people
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 from bad situations at that
time
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.
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, curfews have at least one reason before it was applied.
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