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School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is frequently argued that students are becoming more dependent on electronic devices and, for
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 reason, they have decreased their
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 in reading and writing as a consequence that schools are trying to avoid the fact by stright rules. In
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 essay, I am going to explain the reason why I strongly disagree with the statement.
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, I believe that in modern
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people
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 have to know how to
use
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 a computer due to the fact that in the future all the jobs will require several electronic
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 and so it is important to teach how to
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 them for being efficient,
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, schools and government must provide courses or information about risks or dangers on Internet just to make aware the young
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 a number of
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 think that the basic method of teaching could be more useful, I believe that teachers can
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 provide lessons on computer’s
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 of limit their
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 the fact that it can be a chance for improving their knowledge.
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, the greatest worker in the modern
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 are the ones who can manage and work with laptop, mobile and for
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 reason, the school do not have to avoid using computers,
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, it has to encourage children to make an experience with software and programmes. In conclusion, I believe that today computer’s
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 are essential features of
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 who want to work and live in the modern
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 and I think that the school must teach students how to
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 it
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 of being constant with the old teaching method because the
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Handwriting
  • Cognitive development
  • Memory retention
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  • Tactile experience
  • Enhance
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  • Balanced skill set
  • Traditional teaching methods
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  • Extracurricular activities
  • Reading comprehension
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  • Technological proficiency
  • Educational technology
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