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Some people say it is a waste of time to plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people have assumed that you better think about the present rather than planning your
future
.
However
, I partly agree with
this
 statement and will explain my opinion in the next paragraphs. The reason why I agree is that by living in present you accept all the circumstances and in many cases do not look at the world through rose-coloured glasses. No one has an idea what
life
 will be
in
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 even a
one
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apply
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year
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year's
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 time.
For example
, based on my experience, I try not to look forward to the
future
 as I would better catch every moment and enjoy it rather than
living
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 in thoughts about my
future
life
.
Moreover
,
life
 always can end unexpectedly so wasting time on planning is not
that
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 great idea.
On the other hand
, making plans for the
future
 really helps you to achieve your goals. You write a list with steps that will lead you to your dream and
then
 follow the notes so you do not have a mess in your head. A case in
this
 point can be entering your dream university as you should have a clear plan of
actions
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action
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 like gathering documents, passing exams, interviews
and
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apply
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etc.
As a consequence
, the chance to succeed in admission increases and the selection committee sees potential in you.
To sum up
, both views are correct in various situations but focusing on the present is usually more needed than imagining a
life
 you might never have if you do not work enough on it.
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