Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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a larger number of people argue that a volunteer service should be promoted to
students
in secondary
school
. While I agree free-charged
work
should be seen as
irrevalent
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irreverent
prevalent
for many high
school
students
, I believe that
students
need to take volunteer hours during
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period
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.
To begin
with, it is widely
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acknowledged
that
students
,
espically
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especially
those in senior-high schools, should pay more attention to their
study
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.
For example
,
students
who can gain
a
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outstanding academic performance
are usually spend
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an
enmerous
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enormous
numerous
time
on
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learing
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learning
, which means they don't have sufficient time for unpaid community
sevice
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service
, including
students
tutor or house care.
Conversely
, if they attend
this
kind of job, they might
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valuable time and even can not concentrate for their intensive senior
school
years.
Subsequently
, some of them may
can't
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pass the test.
Moreover
, some
students
might have their own jobs and
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by their employers already. In another word, they are not willing to take the
work
without perks.
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Notwithstanding
,
students
should take the
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responsibility
as
a
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citizens
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in society. It is of utmost importance for them to take the
first
step into
soceity
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society
by
vlounteering
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volunteering
in local communities.
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Furthermore
,it is
a
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oppounrity
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opportunity
for
school
-aged people to enjoy rich experiences from
as
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such
services. Another point is that
,
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some secondary schools and
univeristies
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universities
require
students
to finish
couples
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of hours
voluntary
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work
in high
school
before graduation or becoming a freshman.
Thus
, unpaid voluntary
work
has
became
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a
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necessary
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for
students
. In conclusion, I agree that community
work
is not the most important for high
school
students
, yet
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still support the proposal towards it should be introduced as a compulsory sector to high
school
students
in a considerable way, the
contribuotry
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contributory
contributors
factor is that it could raise the
awerness
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awareness
of
students
socail
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social
responsibility.
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