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Weather countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Generally, some
countries
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 are falling down every year
with
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 any reason that they can not be able to help
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 citizens to grow. Strong
countries
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 must help those needy
people
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 with the basic things to live. I am going to discuss some noted points to
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 statement. Developed
countries
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 should help other
countries
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 in every possible way
in
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which they need. They should call the refugees to live with them in a normal way as they were living previously. As they can easily get food to live and house to stay in another country.
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, as per the recent case of Afghanistan country, the USA and
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Canada are calling to the
people
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 with free cost to their country and continue their
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instead
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 of suffering in
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situation
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. They are taking almost 20% to 50%
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of resident
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resident
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residents
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 to get
better
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life
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. On the other side, developed
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 have
own
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their own
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 residents, who are living with full rights and security
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them
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. If they invited refugees and provided what they require
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 they must sacrifice
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 and
their
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related
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 to happiness and many more things.
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 would not be
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 right way to get
life
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 to others.
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, the residence
people
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 feel some helplessness after entering new persons in town
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 in the opportunity term because they will
also
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 do jobs and do everything as others. In conclusion, strong
countries
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 can call refugees but after making some new rules, policies and trust in
people
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 who are living so they will always feel their privacy, own rules, and
life
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 as well. Because of
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 the peace will maintain with satisfaction among each other.
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