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Some people become famous at a very young age. Do you think this is a good thing or bad thing?

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Being famous at a very young
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 has both a good thing and a bad thing. In my opinion, there are a
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 of bad things that can affect if they become famous at a young
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. In
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 can affect their mental health that will lead to depression.
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 is because children at
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 are not mentally ready to face the burdens of being famous. There will be a
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 of paparazzi around you in every action you will do and one small mistake will be posted on social media. Another reason is that
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 you will not able to do what average people can do. You will have a
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 of limitations.
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, you will be doing homeschooling
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 of going to an educational establishment. You will not enjoy local restaurants as lots of your supporters will follow you.
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 will expose you to pressure, drinks and drugs that will ruin your life in the future. We all know that once you become famous you will have a
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 of activities needs to attend. Lots of people will invite you to a party and with that, you will start to learn how to drink liquor and worst you will
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 learn how to take drugs. In conclusion, I believe that being famous at a young
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 a
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 of bad things in your life. Becoming more financially stable is not enough to risks the harmful effect of depression on the young generations.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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  • Stability
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