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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?

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Recently, there is much evidence indicates that the increasing usage of
cars
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 has caused a negative effect on
people
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’s health as well as contributing to global warming. In my opinion, I believe that there are two ways that can be done to discourage
people
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 from using their
cars
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.
To begin
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 with, the governments can gradually limit
cars
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 usage by imposing taxes.
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 is because if
people
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 find it costly to
use
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 their
cars
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, they will be more likely to
use
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 purchase
cars
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 when it is necessary.
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, in Europe, the gas prices are high and there are high taxes on car prices.
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, a lot of
people
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 in Europe prefer to
use
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 electric public means of transport and bicycles
instead
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 of
cars
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 most of the time.
As a result
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, Europe has one of the cleanest atmospheres
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 healthy for everyone.
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,
this
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 approach alone is not effective in encouraging
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 to
use
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 alternatives for their
cars
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.
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, governments should motivate
people
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 to
use
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 environmentally friendly means of transport. The reason for
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 is that there are many
people
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 who are currently dependent mainly on their personal
cars
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.
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, in the United States of America, the government built many electric
cars
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 charging stations and offers tax reductions for those who buy electric
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.
As a result
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, fuel-based
cars
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 have started to decrease leading to minimize their harmful fumes .
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, the effects of global warming phenomena will be mitigated in long run. In conclusion, the issue caused by the increased
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 of
cars
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 will not be solved in a short time.
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, the government can play a pivotal role in tackling
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 issue by imposing taxes on car usage and give reasonable motivation for
people
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 to
use
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 environmentally friendly means of transport.

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