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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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It is considered by some people that
success
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 is measured by the economic status and some elements
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 as car, home, education and so on.
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, In my opinion, I believe that
success
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 does not solely depend on
wealth
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. A good relationship with other family members, happiness, sound
health
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 etc. is the indicators of being a successful
person
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. To commence with, individuals nowadays believe that property and other material
things
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 can make them successful people. But I think only those
things
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 can not buy
success
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. In India, despite having more reputations and money, a renowned actor 'Shusant Rajput' had committed suicide,
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. He didn't get the taste of
success
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 still he had all
things
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. Everyone has a different set of goals for being a successful
person
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. Many businessmen who already earned billions of dollars might not think of themselves as
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successful
person
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, because, everyone has a particular goal. Without reaching those positions, no one can assume him a successful
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.
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, only
wealth
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 is not the best indicator for measuring
success
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. The
success
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 of any human being is attributed to various types of factors sorts as a supportive family, sound
health
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, happiness and so on, apart from
wealth
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. To give an example, an individual can assume of him as a successful
person
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 if he obtains support from his family at a crucial moment that brings satisfaction and pleasure to his inside.
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, sometimes having a desired job
also
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 makes a
person
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 happy and is the reason for being a successful
person
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. All those
things
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 have a substantial impact on people's
health
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 that influences them to think of as successful. To conclude,
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wealth
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 is an indicator to measure
success
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, it is not the only thing to consider. Having a good relationship with family members and neighbours, self-satisfaction, and satisfactory
health
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 status are need to be considered for being a successful
person
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.
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