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Some people believe that traveling is a valuable experience ;others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Major
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A major
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 of
people
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 suggest that the trip is an essential experience for
their self
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themself
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. While others believe that it is losses of
their
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apply
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time and
money
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both arguments. Foremost,
traveling
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travelling
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 is a good experience for most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 on the way of
development
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developing
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 their knowledge and worldview. If
people
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 visit other foreign countries constantly, they might start
learn
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learning
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 other nation’s
culture
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cultures
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,
language
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languages
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,
history
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histories
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, traditions and values. They can find out a lot of foreign friends, improve communication skills and it can
be makes
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make
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 their life more fascinating and ecstatic.
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, Traveling can help you build a positive outlook and draw joyful prospects in your mind.
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, it can be denied that the trip is
wastage
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a wastage
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 of
people
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’s time and
money
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.
People
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 buy vouchers for big
money
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 to visit
another countries
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another country
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,
instead
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 of saving up
money
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 for real estate. In some situations, some
people
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 take debt from
state
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the state
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 in order to travel and after joying in foreign countries they begin to pay their credit.
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, they lose their time for improving
carriers
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careers
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 and life.
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, Tourists do not orient themselves well to a foreign country and may become fraud victims. Thieves and pickpockets may steal
money
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 and valuable things. To sum up, in my perspective travelling always broadens one's horizons and enriches them with pleasant experiences, which directly affect emotional health and a sense of life satisfaction.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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