Some universities now offer their course in the internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development.

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It can be seen that online learning becoming a popular function of

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Although

there are some drawbacks of online courses, I would argue that there are far more benefits.

To begin

with, the main drawback of online

university

learning is that there is less direct interaction.

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may not have a chance to engage

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with their teachers and they could be lacked outdoor activities by only using the computer.

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direct with each other and

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can meet their teacher for some

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. These reasons would bring some attractive competition to

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learning. Despite, the negative mentioned above, I believe that online

university

learning is a beneficial development that

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a variety of supporting reason.

Firstly

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could learn from various places around the world which the internet is accessible. So that

people

may work wherever and whenever is convenient.

Secondly

, the cost of

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education

would be greatly reduced, while revenues for institutions might increase as more as the number of students could be taught.

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able to move from country to country,

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courses from overseas which they want to study. If online learning did not have in the

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In conclusion, while I recognize the disadvantages of online learning, I consider it to be more a positive development far more negative.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some universities now offer their course in the internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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