There are severe social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve these problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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House is the most crucial part of people's lives. If a question about the lack of housing in the cities is addressed, it will be challenging for us to make a decision on
this
controversial issue. Some people are firm believers in only government solving. Others,
however
, have shown intense devotion to everybody's problems.
This
essay disagrees with
this
argument and will examine the solution to
this
problem. The most and obvious solution is the large company which can increase the GDP of the country ought to distribute the job into the countryside. The main reason for lacking housing is many people move to the town because there are more opportunities in career paths and
also
more salaries.
Therefore
, many companies have to spread the job to other areas. As the result, the worker can get a job in their hometown
then
the population in cities will decrease and the housing shortages will be decline
consequently
.
Moreover
, the citizens have to realise that there are limited places in the metropolis. So they have to develop their hometown. According to local university research, it indicates that Chaingmai is the
second
richest province in Thailand which have the most growth's rate. The rationale behind
this
is their community help each other to stay in the city and support the local business. As the result, more teenagers stay in their home town and do not commute to the capital city. In conclusion,
this
problem is not the
gorvernment's
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government's
responsible
nevertheless
it can be helped by the big company to distribute the opportunity to the countryside. From my perspective, if everybody agrees to help each other, the country can develop not only in the cities but
also
in entire the country.
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