as a result of tourism, many historical buildings and sites are being damaged beyond repair. What could be done to prevent this?

In recent years, there has been considerable growth in the tourism industry and massive tourism has damaged many ancient
buildings
and
sites
. In
this
essay, the solutions to tackle the issue of
this
phenomenon will be proposed and evaluated in detail.
Firstly
, on the governmental side, the government should put a restriction on the number of tourists to historical
sites
to prevent
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destruction. Nowadays, that
people
are likely to be more interested in exploring ancient
buildings
leads to a large number of travellers which has a negative consequence on the historical
sites
. If the number of tourists visiting an old building at the same time is limited, the security will be improved and the building will be protected. Take Forbidden City in Beijing as an example, one of the most visited museums in the world
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put a cap on the
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of visitors to 80.000 a day which is only as much as a tenth of that before. Another solution is to enact a strict rule which demands
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a high monetary fine with
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damages ancient
buildings
.
In addition
, the government
also
needs to charge for the entrance of historical
sites
and utilize that money for maintenance.
Secondly
, on
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side, individuals need to raise their awareness
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the value of historical
buildings
and
sites
. Having a comprehensive knowledge
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the culture and history,
people
will appreciate ancient
sites
more.
Thus
,
people
will learn to protect them
instead
of
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.
Moreover
, citizens can express their affection
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these
buildings
and
sites
by applying themselves to organisations or agencies that work to protect cultural
heritage
. It is a fact that cultural
heritage
also
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to be preserved because
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repair does not work sufficiently. Being a staff of these organisations,
people
not only have a job position but
also
more understand about the historical value of the
heritage
. “
Heritage
for peace” is an organisation like that and a survey conducted shows that there are thousands of
people
from different ages and professions applying themselves to work willingly. In conclusion, degradation
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historical
buildings
and
sites
is a matter of concern and needs both the government and individuals to join hands to resolve
this
problem. In the future, there will be more efficient solutions to protect
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heritage
sites
from being damaged.
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