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The maintenance of public libraries is a waste of money because of computer technologies that have the same function. to what extent to you agree and disagree?

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The technology of computers has provided numerous
information
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 so that investing money in
libraries
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 maintenance is considered wasteful. I completely disagree with the given notation,
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 the internet has given the easiest way to find hidden and difficult
information
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 with the easiest way still library importance can not be ignored.
First
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 and foremost technology is the easiest way to find any
information
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 and they can get any update from any corner of the world just by doing one click. Another reason for using a computer is because of a hectic schedule of jobs which make them tired and people avoid visiting
libraries
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. In other ,words
libraries
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 are open just for specific hours of days which will restrict people to visit at a specific time while the internet is available at any time and all
information
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 is just one click away from the reader.
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, managing
information
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 on a computer is just easier and reliable.
On the other hand
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, the importance of
libraries
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 can not be ignored as the most reliable and authentic source of
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 is published books
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 for study it needs focus and concentration which can be available in
libraries
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 only.
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, many old age people are incapable of using technology and
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 they find it quite difficult in accessing online
libraries
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as a result
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 physical
libraries
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 are still their
first
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 choice to acquire
information
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. In conclusion, despite the obvious advantages of online sources of
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, in my opinion, there are sufficient grounds to reject the view that maintaining physical
libraries
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 is unnecessary
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