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air travel can travel only benefit the richrst people in the world.ordinary prople can get no advantage with the developmeny of air travel .to what do you agree or disagree

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In recent years, the trend has been changed toward the travel and airline industry has grown significantly. Still, a section of society thought that it gives benefit only to rich
people
,
although
 others argue differently. They think that a normal household does not get any advantage. I totally disagree with
this
 statement and believe that
both
 sections of society have equally benefit but with little difference. In the course of the essay, I will describe
both
 sides advantages.
Firstly
, these days flights are affordable for an average person. In the early years of the airline industry is expensive, slow, and only in the range of rich
people
 but these days much cheaper than before. Now, middle-class easily get the ticket of an aeroplane and reduce there distance which they travel in days or weeks but now it is a game of hours. The airline industry divides its
plane
 into three categories according to prices and facilities.
For instance
, economy class is much cheaper than the business class
although
 it has the difference between luxury and quality,
however
 it takes equal
time
 from point A to B for
both
 rich and normal person.
Secondly
, it is equally safe for
both
 kinds of
people
. Rich
people
 have other moods of transportation which provide high-level safety in comparison to middle-class transportation. In a
plane
,
both
 are using the same
plane
 and which is equally safe for
both
.
However
, rich
people
 have more money to enjoy their
time
 on the
plane
 because everything has its own price. In conclusion,
both
 sections of the community have the equal advantage of the
plane
 and the similar
time
 but rich section society pay more to enjoy their travel
time
.
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