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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. Reason for this? Some solutions.

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Nowadays, criminal cases are increasing at an alarming rate all over the world.
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 trend is mainly rising among the youngsters due to
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 and the lack of parental care.
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, there is a range of measures that could be implemented to resolve the issue of youth
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. The
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 reason for the higher
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 rate in adolescents is that they are usually attracted to films. These days, various programs showcase different ways to earn illegal money in a short period of span, which influence many teenagers. Because of
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, they wish to try these methods
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 as robbery, forgeries, which leads to serious
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.
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, many
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 are unable to provide proper attention to their children. It has been observed that the majority of
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 are working around the clock for bread and butter, and for the betterment of their kids.
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, children are left alone in the home without any elder eye. They indulge in bad companies and sometimes commit a
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, resulting in
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future loss.
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, there are a number of steps that could be taken to solve
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 issue.
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 and foremost, the law authorities should telecast the
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 events based on the age group. If the child wants to watch any program, they should fill a form with the consent and agreement. Only after the complete verification, they should be given access.
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,
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 should take out some quality time from their hectic work schedule. They must learn to manage their working hours in a way that plenty of time can be devoted to their child growth. In conclusion, not only the addiction to
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 but no parental support increases the causes of youth
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. Only when the government will allow restrictions to the
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 programs on the basis of age and
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 start taking care of their kids, will
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 solution be remedied.
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