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In some countries, buying a car rather than renting one is very important for people.   Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Having proper accommodation is
one
 out of four fundamental needs for human beings nowadays. Apart from that sense of belonging is
also
 significant nature for social animals.
In other words
, how we emphasised the requirement to own an asset
such
 as a house in some countries.
This
 essay will argue why in some countries people should owning a home rather than renting
one
. A permanent resident is essential for people who settled for decisions on how they are addressing responsibility in life. If you decided to live here forever the total cost which spend on dwelling’s rental each month for the rest of your life is definitely much more than the sum of an instalment bill you paid each month.
Although
, you desire
one
 you must have the capability to own
one
. ,
Also
 asset’s possession can represent social value these days. While a majority of the population in some countries can not afford their own house because of financial problems that affect by the governing’s mistaken welfare management.
On the other hand
 renting might be a solution for certain communities. Some people might not need permanent accommodation they just need a temporary resident
such
 as a college student who was born and raised in a remote area but have to take all classes on a campus located in the inner-centre city for a few periods of time. They should not raise their cost of living by spending on what they do not need. For
this
 statement to my way of thinking it really depends on the individual. There are valid points for both sides. Whilst you have to concern about the consequences of owning and maintain something.
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