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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Environmental and economical challenges in the globe not only will affect at the national level but
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 at the individual levels,
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, there is a trend of
people
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 working themselves
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 of working for an employer, yet there are many drawbacks. There are many reasons behind the increase in the number of start-up companies.
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 with, most of the
people
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 living in
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 era missing their personal life due to the heavy workload, yet they are paid less at the end of the month,
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, they see a silver lining if they can be seen themselves as an entrepreneur. As an example,
people
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 who work for multinational companies are required to work in late hours since some of the tasks should be completed during those
time
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 due to time zone differences.
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 is due to the global economical fluctuations and when employers are trying to make a profit without considering their
employees
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employee's
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 wellbeing.
As a result
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, employees will develop stress and lose their personal life while creating a state of dissatisfaction at their workplace, and they continuously search for alternative ways of making
a sufficient amounts
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 of money where they can get a high profit
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 of monthly pay.
However
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, there are several drawbacks to
this
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. Especially, when a person is engaging in an independent pursuit of economic activity, they must take a higher risk of securing a permanent source of income. As an example, when a person tries to do a textile shop, he must consider the difficulties of a situation that the globe is experiencing
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 as the Covid-19 pandemic.
This
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 kind of unexpected situation will make businesses
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 as those are in the clothing industry, into a miserable state, yet most of the
people
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 will stay inside and will not go outside due to the plague.
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, they must consider facing these kinds of unpredictable stages of business and must save money in case of overcoming
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 situations which will be an impossible task for most. In conclusion, self-employed individuals may earn a lot of money compared to an employee who receives wedges;
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, they are keeping themselves at an insecure stage where the income will not be constant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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