Musems and historical sites are mostly visit by tourists not local people. why this is a positive or negative development?

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various historical

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and a variety of

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vital role in

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life.

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any city , country . I can easily understand their languages, history and culture.

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indis to see several historical

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like jallianwala bagh, taj mahal to increase their knowledge .

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know about mastery from books, stories and parents.

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like to see old infrastructure historical

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learning skills. Local communities recognise the

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government should invest money in these historical

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. There are so many

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who are coming from New Zealand , Canada , Uk. They uplift the economy of the country on other hand local

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are busy on their works and they do not

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these

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. In conclusion,

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these

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because of a busy schedule.

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it is promoted by all means

naresh

Sep 16, 2021

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