In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kine of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this opinion.

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In certain countries, excessive fast
food
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consumption has
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affected
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effected
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affected
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the
life
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of many
people
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as it is the cause of
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problems. For the government to impose a higher
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on
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kind of
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is crucial. I partially agree with
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statement because there are some alternative policies
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may
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steer
people
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away from excessive fast
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consumption. Many diseases, obesity, diabetes and hypertension, occur in bad-eating
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thus
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coercive measure to impose the
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on junk
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is accepted whether it has effective and is worth managing the increasing number of consumers.
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, it makes fast
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less desirable as higher
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means higher
fast
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food
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prices. To illustrate, most
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, including workers and students, have
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limited lunch budgets.
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, the state can use
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tax
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to promote other
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policies due to the
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in revenue from
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extra rate can fund
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health- related
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campaigns
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as extra support or benefits for restaurants that serve healthy dishes.
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, diners, that have been certified by the government that they serve healthy dishes, may get
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exemptions or may be able to apply for a business loan from a state-owned bank.
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, here are some policies which may
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steer
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from excessive unhealthy consumption. Government should use other measurement tools and create
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model
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such
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as educate
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on healthy products and unhealthy products and implement programs to help young citizens familiarize themselves with
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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diets
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.
Citizen
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Citizens
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should be educated on the
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benefits as well as potential dangers that come with
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.
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, once
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have been
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, they can choose for themselves and unhealthy
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may cause them to have serious
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problems, which will surely incur unnecessary
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expenses
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. To sum up, using the policy of increasing
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tax
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the tax
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of
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fast
food
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is important but the
citizen
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should use
others
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other
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measures to combine for the maximum benefit of the consumers.
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