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Modern lifestyle is completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think that the changes have been very positive while some others believe they have negative.

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Nowadays, the development of the digital age has had a huge impact on humanity . In a modern
world
,
People
 having opened mindset and eliminating the old social prejudice and living depends on the internet has created several arguments about whether
this
 change of
world
 is positive or negative. Personally, I support that it having more disadvantages than goods.
This
 essay will show clearly my opinion In the present-day
world
,
people
 living
in convenience
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inconvenience
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 and getting technical support that helps a lot in reducing the number of works even saving time. Take advantage of the fast growth of society, more services including food, shopping was created in order to serve the fast-living life.
However
, too much convenience has given many consequences.
For instance
, dealing with mental problems
such
 as fast food, an invention of convenience, is one of many serious diseases’ causes by ingredients that are usually made of oil and food that are not processed that do harm to
people
 health conditions day by day.
On the other hand
, due to technological help,
as a result
, laziness appears more often than in the past, it affects a lot on
people
 productivity,
as a result
, work tasks are pretty often being delay. Another advantage of modern life that are
people
 spending more time using social media or phones
instead
 of communicating and staying with family. In conclusion, there are more negative effects of the nowadays
world
 development, we need to be aware of society and the change of
world
 to protect the fading of culture and history from the growth of technology life
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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