Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment?

Some
people
would rather live in a
house
than live in an apartment, as they believe that living in a
house
will provide more benefits to them. From my perspective, I think that there are more advantages than disadvantages to living in a
house
. In the following paragraphs, I will give my reasons to support my opinions.
Firstly
,
generally
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,generally

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a
house
,having more space than a
condominuim
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condominium

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, can organize several activities which will create benefit to a family.
For example
, during the pandemic of Covid-19,
people
have to work from their home, while their children have to study from home as well. If they live in a
house
, they could help their space and privacy to do their business.
In contrast
, an apartment ,which normally has
smaller
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area, could be difficult to set up a privacy
coner
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corner

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.
Thus
, living in a larger place is better than living in the smaller one.
Secondly
, there are more risks of living
apartments
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than houses.
This
includes
risk
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the risk
a risk

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of fire,
risk
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the risk

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from security, etc.
For instance
, it can be seen from the news that some
people
may cause a fire
by
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accidentally, leading to the situation that all residents have to evacuate from the building because all rooms are connected.
Nevertheless
,
this
situation will be less likely
happen
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in a
house
. In conclusion, some
people
prefer to moving into a condominium, but considering its benefits and drawbacks will see that there are more advantages to living in a
house
, including larger area and
less
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risks.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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