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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in an apartment?

Some
people
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 would rather live in a
house
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 than live in an apartment, as they believe that living in a
house
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 will provide more benefits to them. From my perspective, I think that there are more advantages than disadvantages to living in a
house
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. In the following paragraphs, I will give my reasons to support my opinions.
Firstly
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generally
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,generally
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 a
house
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 ,having more space than a
condominuim
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condominium
, can organize several activities which will create benefit to a family.
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, during the pandemic of Covid-19,
people
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 have to work from their home, while their children have to study from home as well. If they live in a
house
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, they could help their space and privacy to do their business.
In contrast
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, an apartment ,which normally has
smaller
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a smaller
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 area, could be difficult to set up a privacy
coner
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corner
.
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, living in a larger place is better than living in the smaller one.
Secondly
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, there are more risks of living
apartments
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in apartments
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 than houses.
This
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 includes
risk
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the risk
a risk
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 of fire,
risk
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the risk
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 from security, etc.
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, it can be seen from the news that some
people
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 may cause a fire
by
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apply
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accidentally, leading to the situation that all residents have to evacuate from the building because all rooms are connected.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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 situation will be less likely
happen
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to happen
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 in a
house
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. In conclusion, some
people
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 prefer to moving into a condominium, but considering its benefits and drawbacks will see that there are more advantages to living in a
house
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, including larger area and
less
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fewer
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 risks.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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