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Most governments think that economical progress is important. While some people think that other kinds of progress is also important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most governments think that the economic success of their countries is the most es senti goal, whereas in some
people
 opinion other kinds of progress are equally important as well. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and
also
 explained with examples that why I agree with the former statement.
Firstly
, I will talk about why other achievements
such
 as sports are
also
 important and
secondly
, I will elaborate on the benefits of economical progression. On the one hand, some
people
 believe that equal importance should be given to other fields. Sports, music and arts are
also
 important for entertainment and refreshment purposes.
For instance
, in developed countries with huge economical ,success the stress level is
also
 increased. So, in order to overcome the anxiety, depression caused by constant work pressure, there should be sports and gymnastic centre's, cinemas and concerts.
This
 will give the opportunity to
people
 to diverge their minds from work.
On the other hand
, economical progress should be the most important target for every country.
This
 is due to the fact that countries growth depends upon industries, export and import business. If the country is strong in those zones that's mean there is almost a job for every person. The government have funds to spend
in
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 education, health and infrastructure. In conclusion,
although
 the development of other fields is essential but economical strength can give
people
 the chance to spend satisfactory lifestyle.
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