All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children's future. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In Today's most developing and fast-growing world parents have to
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on their children. A number of people think that a
school
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have to
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on different
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instead
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of particular skills. while I strongly believed that, a
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priorities to provide
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of varies
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, one convincing argument can be made that, during the schooling
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infants brain starting developing while at the same
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an educational provider has to
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on different
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, it means that the child gets various subject
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which helps them to day to day life in future. Let's take Indian schools, as an example, in the Indian schools students have to learn all
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which make child accurate in each and every file.
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, because of the wide choice of
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teenagers decide what they have to pursue in future according to their interest.
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, it is
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undeniable that the child
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needs some kind of the skills during
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time
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such
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as reading, playing the game, singing and many more.
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, Those skill helps to the children gain skill
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filed only. The best instance is western
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, where students are more interested in games and less interested in maths because during their schooling
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they just
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on games. As well as they often struggle with their general
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because of a lack of interest in science.
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, it can be concluded that, if children do not have any
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about different
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then
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they will never achieve specific skills in their life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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