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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. advantages and disadvantages

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Technology usage has been increasing rapidly. Needs are being bought online by the populace who are burgeoning day by day. While
this
 development is beneficial for society, I would like to argue that its disadvantages are more significant.
This
 essay will discuss both benefits and drawbacks of
this
 subject along with prominent instances.
First
 of all, more
advantages
 can be seen with the above-advanced technology. A primary advantage of
this
 development is it is convenient and it takes less time when compared to offline shopping.
For instance
, individuals can purchase items at any time, anywhere through their mobiles. A
second
 advantage would be, they can get a number of options in a single app,
in addition
 to
this
, they get more offers provided by the online applications.
For example
, electronic shopping applications like Amazon, Flipkart, Nykaa and so on, which bestow more discounts for customers.
Moreover
, society depends more on mobile for their daily needs.
on the other hand
, despite the
advantages
, there are ample disadvantages.
Firstly
, masses too rely on electronic gadgets for their daily needs
such
 as for small things
also
 they are using online. Due to
this
, they may not physically active,
as a result
, they may obese
also
. To illustrate
this
, earlier, populace gone for Kirana shops for normal needs by walk or bicycle but now they do not prefer. Another possible disadvantage is economically local shops may havoc,
as a result
, local manufactures would lose heavily. To cite an example, when more masses opt for online shopping, virtual shops may decrease and end with a loss of money. To conclude
this
, considering both the opinions,
although
 the above-stated subject gives more
advantages
 to the society, I believe that disadvantages outweigh the
advantages
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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