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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •say what the participants liked about the hotel •explain why they were unhappy about the food •suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a manager who organized the
workshop
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 at your hotel
last
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 weekend. I am writing to you to express some comments from participants from the
workshop
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. It is totally true that most employees highlighted in the feedback about the hotel which included high-speed wi-fi, big rooms, very polite receptions and high standard cleaning. They were so happy that, and some of them mentioned the location of the hotel was the best place to visit many attractions when they had free time. The bad things were lunch and dinner during the
workshop
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according to
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 the feedback from the participants. I believe that a
chef
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 was not there during that weekend because one of the restaurant’s waiters mentioned the
chef
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. The
chef
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 had a private reason to not come to the restaurant. I would suggest that if there is not a
chef
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 in the restaurant, there should be a deputy to do things in the correct way because we do not organize the
workshop
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 too many times. Yours Faithfully, Eric

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to provide a clearer explanation of why the participants were unhappy with the food. For example, mention specific issues like taste, variety, or presentation.
Task Achievement
Avoid minor grammatical errors. For example, instead of “They were so happy that,” you might say “They were very happy with these aspects.”
Task Achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the prompt effectively, mentioning both the positive aspects of the hotel and giving a suggestion for improvement.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, which is suitable for writing to a hotel manager.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical, with clear paragraphs dedicated to each point that needs to be covered.
Coherence and Cohesion
The closing and greeting are appropriate and formal.
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