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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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These days, the population in the urban area has dramatically increased because vast
people
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 from countryside
areas
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 immigrate into the
cities
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, which may eventually cause some adverse impact to residents and the environment. In
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 move toward the developed towns.
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, the consequences of overpopulation in
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urban
areas
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 will be mentioned. The
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 reason for an innumerable increase in immigration toward the
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 is a better opportunity to search for better companies, which pay higher salaries compared to those in rural
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.
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, a prestigious company in Bangkok offers
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 salary to a fresh bachelor graduate around 20,000 Baht, whereas, the salary getting from the companies located in the countryside is approximately 12,000 Baht, which is less than almost double.
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, the urban towns can provide
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better well-being to
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. Educationally, Bangkok has various quality schools and prestigious universities for children to study, so it is
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advantage
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 for your family member. For
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 reason, the number of
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 in
cities
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 has enormously
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 every year.
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, overpopulation can cause mental health
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problems
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 among citizens. To illustrate, many hours struggling on the road as the result of traffic jams can be
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 routine in the
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.
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 can lead to the stress
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occurring
 from waiting in a car for many hours every day.
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, it can wreak havoc on the environmental aspect. As the intensive urbanization for accomodating the increased number of citizens, many trees are
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 down, and waste releasing from
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 contaminates the water and soil
resouces
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resources
.
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, these problems should be tackled
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immediately
 to alleviate the disastrous consequences. In summary, the recent situation that numerous
indivaduals
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individuals
immigate
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immigrate
immigrated
 into the
cities
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 concerns many countries across the world because
people
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 believe that they can secure
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better opportunity and well livelihood in the urban
areas
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, which eventually causes numerous problems detrimentally contributing to the stress, and the environmental issue.
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