In many countries, people now wear western-style dress such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, with the development of media and the
Internet
, we can easily access Western cultures. One of the social phenomena caused by
this
development is, more and more
people
wear western-
style
clothes
such
as suits and jeans
instead
of traditional outfits.
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essay will discuss the reason
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this
situation and the negative aspects of the blind pursuit of Western
culture
. One of the biggest
reason
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behind
this
trend is the advancement of information technology. Almost every
people
in the world can connect to the
Internet
and access
variety
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of
contents
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in many different ways. Since many
people
exposed
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to foreign cultures a lot, they naturally feel that the
culture
is nice, some
people
even think that the
culture
is superior to their own
culture
. These days, many global companies, especially
fashion
brands, use western
people
when they advertise their products. According to recent research, nine out of ten
people
see
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of
fashion
brands
everyday
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and above 80
percent
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of these
people
reported that the brand they saw is
western
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one.
As a result
, consumers don't have any resistance to
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style
apparel. Among the many reasons why I think
this
is a negative development is that
this
can be harmful to our own
culture
. Each
culture
has its own identity, and our dressing
style
reflects our identity.
Although
the introduction of
Western
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style
can help to improve our own
fashion
, it would lead to a loss of our
culture
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identity.
For instance
, in my country, many
people
wear our own costume on our New Year’s
day
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. Since a few years ago,
however
, many
people
start to wearing
Western
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style
casual clothes
instead
of our traditional costume, called Hanbok. Our traditional clothes are becoming obsolete and being ignored. Because who we are is ingrained in our
style
, it is important to preserve our own
fashion
style
.
Otherwise
, our
culture
can be damaged,
furturemore
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furthermore
, can be lost. To conclude, media and
Internet
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changed our lives a lot, but it is true that excessive exposure to the
Internet
and media has put our
culture
in danger. To preserve our
culture
, we should develop
sensible
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attitude towards other cultures.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • cultural homogenization
  • western-style dress
  • traditional clothing
  • cosmopolitan
  • modernity
  • fashion preferences
  • cultural identity
  • conformity
  • practicality
  • multinational corporations
  • socio-economic factors
  • cross-cultural
  • cultural appreciation
  • diversity
  • influence
  • heritage
  • textiles
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