Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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black
tea
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leaves and ending with drying the leaves to eliminate the
moisture
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begins with selecting the good quality
tea
leaves, followed by the withering process, in which leaves are places over the racks and air passes
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them, in order to eliminate 60% of the
moisture
. Now, the process is divided into two methods, one is known as
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, leaves are shaped flat to
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the enzymes from leaves.
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bags, they cut leaves to produce smaller granular pieces and
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quicker as compared to the traditional
method
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next
is oxidation, which is
also
known as fermentation. In
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or hot air dryer to release the
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helps to reduce 97% of
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from the
tea
leaves.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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