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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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While in the past people were willing to
work
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 for others these days individuals tend to
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 for their own business. In
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 way, they would not only have more freedom but
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 earn more
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,
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, it may have some negative points. There are various reasons to be self-employed.
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, people could be their own boss and it is not necessary to obey others orders as a consequence, they have far more liberty.
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, the person is not forced to go to
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 early morning and come back at a specific time.
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, they have flexible
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 time and can do their
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 whenever they want.
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, when somebody is self-employed all the
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 that he earns for himself. In the other words, they have more motivation to expand their jobs to gain more profits so that they reach a better career prospect.
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, being self-employed have some drawbacks. It could be riskier because these persons may face bankruptcy and lose their own investment and since they do not have a fixed salary, they may get into trouble to provide living expenses.
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, having a business brings more responsibilities. One is more likely to go to
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 on holidays or at weekends due to heavy workloads.
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 it would be a demanding job with less spare time. In conclusion, today's people because of liberty in the
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 environment and make more
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 prefer to establish their own business even though, self-employed has some problems and difficulties
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 as losing their
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 and shoulder more responsibilities
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