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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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It is often considered that do experiment on
animals
such
 as mice, rabbits or frogs should be banned, while other people think that it is essential for finding scientific
knowledge
.
This
 essay will discuss why it is reasonable to
test
 on
animals
 and other ways to replace them. In the beginning, we cannot deny that scientists did experiments on
animals
 a long time ago. It is reasonable because they found
lots
 of information and theories which is beneficial for humans. In the past, they lacked
technologies
 to discover new
knowledge
 from other methods
instead
 of
test
 on
animals
.
For instance
, the German doctor found the pituitary gland which releases a hormone from the brain in frog and
this
 data help
lots
 of patients who suffer from hormone deficiency
Thus
, it is necessary to discover the science and medical
knowledge
 from these tests.
On the other hand
, nowadays the
technologies
 are developed in
lots
 of ways and almost 80% of experiments do not have to do on
animals
. The GMO is one of the
technologies
 that can replace the experiment on them by using clones of human tissues or plant tissue
instead
 of the real ones. It is effective and has an accurate result.
For example
,
lots
 of cosmetic companies in Korea use clone cells to
test
 their products
instead
 of rabbits and the result is as same as the old tests.
However
, some studies need to
test
 on the real sample because it has unique systems that are extremely complicated . In conclusion, in the past, we could not do the tests without
animals
 because of poor innovations and
knowledge
. These days, a lot of research does not have to use living samples, it can use new
technologies
instead
 of the old ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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